Peer feedback on my written proposal helped me cut down on the unnecessary background information in my introduction. I was spending so much time on details that I didn’t leave room to develop and present a thesis. I also didn’t explicitly state that my thesis would deal with race, rather I left it heavily implied. After getting feedback, I took out significant sections of my introduction, re-organized the presentation of my argument, and re-wrote my conclusion to frame how I will be addressing race in my RBA.
In my in-class presentation, I received feedback on how to more explicitly present the racial aspects of my research topic. In the center portion of the bottom section, I previously had a long paragraph about specific rhetorical choices and the national-level sovereign citizen movement. I was told that this seemed unrelated to the earlier sections of my infographic and was also quite wordy, making it unlikely that a viewer would read and engage with that specific section. In viewing the infographic, people felt that side-by-side comparisons of images and facts made the most powerful points when it came to directing attention toward an argument.
My research focuses on understanding the history of the land on which the Malheur and Standing Rock movements took/are taking place. I will examine how each group specifically engaged with race in their rhetoric and how that affected their message. I will also present the reactions taken by law enforcement, local citizens, and the media, with a focus on the intersection of land use and ownership history and race. I believe that current race relations in these situations are inextricably connected to the history of the land and that activist groups use intentional presentations of history to further their messages.