A lot of my feedback had to do with swinging and tone variation. A consistent thread in the feedback regarding the content that I received had to do with the following issues:
- I’m not defining activism explicitly. While I talk about some superficial justification for why it makes sense to try to show that Russian rock is a form of activism, I never really say what I mean by this. This lead to me thinking a lot about what interpretations of “activism” fit the frame of my facts best. Making my RBA, I will dedicate some portion of it to specifying what I mean by activism and why I choose this particular definition.
- I don’t specify what time frame specifically I will be discussing and not showing the link between the cases of modern Russia and USSR. I decided I will focus of the 1980-90 period and nowadays and reiterate the links between the two throughout my RBA (the links are extensive: modern musicians aren’t just standing on the shoulders of the USSR musicians, the latter are still present on the musical arena).
Thesis: Rock music in the late USSR and modern Russia are a form of activism.